Hey, saw traces of you around here yesterday. Are you returning or are you just getting my hopes up?

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Thanks for the comments, will try to explain in a while. 's Been ages since I've heard or seen of you.

How's things going? And yeah I'll drop by to check your works soonly.

Groovz

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Father of ^inennui, Drunken uncle of ~jesusbite, Grampa of *xomatose, gusto's ! gustoboy and son of a ^ ndifference

first, i wanted to apologize for kind of going off there, i guess your comment topped the sundae and nicked me to the point of just taking that damn poem down. nevertheless, i do value criticism and agree with the fact that theres so much of this selfish crap flooding deviantart, and all of this crap represents a personal release of expression that is officially labelled as art. and a good chunk of it usually is, and a healthy portion is crap just as well. but the point is improvement. the criticism i received from you and unrecognisable probably helped me more than any on that piece, mainly because it shoved the faults into my face rather than sugarcoating the bitter truth. so thank you once again!

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hahaha! though, I've yet to read your work (soon, I promise), I'm sure you probably put about the same amount of care into its creation as I put into mine or anyone else puts into theirs. I've been known to border on asshole myself but, we're all hypocrites so don't even worry about that.

I wondered if I might have that problem with my screenshots someday. it happens, I suppose...

you're right though, I don't think there's a whole lot about American capitalism in RYMOWS. I generally try to observe the form rather than get into messy specifics of anything remotely political.

I'm certain those are quite heavy habits to drop. I'm very pleased to know that my poetry is not a completely useless distraction but, of course, some would say neither is morphine.
in all seriousness, though, you're very welcome to whatever I can offer and I wish you luck at staying 'clean' because I'm sure you'll be infinitely happier as a result.

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Changing pace a bit:
I would get carried away,
many worms would turn.
Thanks for your advice... I'll might let some slack from fivesevenfive, but the restraint of that scheme is usually plenty enough for my pointlessness.

well, you made more sense this time. my only rebuttal to the points you made is:

regarding "Raped Your Mouth Out With Soap," I am quite confident that those perspectives/concepts were in the poem and were clear in the poem, if you read carefully enough. my intention was so subtle, however, that I had to make it explicit in the poem's description, for you know as well as I that hardly every member of deviantart is sharp like you and me (the ones able to grasp the numerous conceptual implications of a work of art). therefore, the purpose of my explicit description was to provide courtesy for my less intellectual readers. (sometimes you need to give someone a shove before he or she can jump for his or her self.) also, if you noticed, my courtesy was not a free throw-away--instead of just telling them the answers, I solicited responses by asking my readers to apply. it may be "like" a disclaimer to do so but, if you are thorough enough, you realize that it simply is not a disclaimer. I hardly prefaced my poem with "it's not really that good" or "I'm still working on it," nor will I ever. I totally agree with you that poetry by definition should stand alone as words and readers' interpretations but, I remind you that very few among us actually consistently live up to that standard. it is often necessary to lend a hand.

bottom line, your helping me to examine my motives is very generous and I thank you for spending so much time reading, rereading, and commenting. I only hope that I offer a similar assistance to you.

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you come with an interesting perspective so I will express my interest...

first, regarding my piece "Kiss Off," to answer your question: yes, for people who question the use of telling in a poem's description because they cannot pull it off/do not yet understand how to do so/etc., it is ridiculous, and reasonably so. I suggest, as a solution to this trivial discrepancy of perspective, paying attention to specific situations more than complete obedience to general principles like "show don't tell" for a change. also, you are correct, I did go too far with the one-word lines but, once again, you are not paying close enough attention to purpose. utility is the name of the game.

secondly, regarding my piece "Raped Your Mouth Out With Soap": to put your mind at ease, the truth is that both my poetry and I am smart. nonetheless, with comments prefaced by such beside-the-point speculation, I suppose you really have restored the liveliness to my readers' feedback. further, considering the irrelevant premise of the comment you left on this piece, I'm not even going to bother rebutting the fallacious mess with which you conclude the same comment.

if you'll please excuse my eye for an eye...
you have a bad attitude and you ramble off subject but I love you. thank you for commenting and keep it coming!

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thanks for your comment on my poem, as if i didnt realize it was grammatically crap and hence the poem is crap itself, i have no will to do anything to it, i dont care for it, i hate the poem itself. its too bad its one of the most popular ones i have, hence it shows to have a girl on the cover of a poem and a catchy screenshot equals more views, but really, thanks for the criticism, if you scroll a bit further up youll find 3 more harsher ones, especially one from your buddy unrecognisable. and once again, that poem was meant for no one but myself, i dont care if you dont get it, your not supposed to, THATS WHY ITS SO CONFUSING. ever vent through words? even if you havent, please, just let it go and accept that others do, even if they are not damn poets. if you even bothered to look at any of my other work, i do usually use commas and proper punctuation, although i do not care for either or, hence my style of writing, which is supposed to sound like random babbling, seeing as thats the way i talk and type half the time. so thank you once again, so sorry you did not enjoy my writing.

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Thanks for your comment. I appreciate the feedback - it's a rare thing with words instead of pictures around here.
"Smelled scavengers out the woodwork" - it's when the scavengers come crawling out of the woodwork (to turn a phrase appropriatly) - they're 'smelled' out, as in to say they're tracking a scent. It's a bit of a leap, but I liked how it sounded too much to have it any other way.

Kept five seven five,
syllables gurgle out like
drained eustachian tubes.

There are other ways to write haiku? I thought that was it...